Fever Redux (or, No-Star Cell Service) [ch. 1] PG13

coco · Post by **coco** » Sat May 23, 2009 4:21 pm

This is just fabulous Nocturne.

What a delightful twist to Fever.

redwinter101 · Post by **redwinter101** » Sat May 23, 2009 5:50 pm

This is wonderful, Julie. Really wonderful. You capture Mick's anguish so brilliantly - and the Leni we all saw: feisty, strong, determined. She's wonderful:

NocturneInCMoll wrote:“What if I can’t control myself?” he said hoarsely.

“If you can’t control yourself, why am I still sitting here?”

So perfect.

NocturneInCMoll wrote:Mick squeezed his eyes shut tight, but a tear escaped. “What kind of monster takes blood from a pregnant woman?”

He felt a hard slap across his face and he opened his eyes in surprise. Leni was glaring down at him.

“A monster wouldn’t think twice about it.

Out of the mouths of babes...

This is such a wonderful scene and I can't wait to read more (although I did find this really tricky to read because of your formatting - maybe it's just me?).

Red

NocturneInCMoll · Post by **NocturneInCMoll** » Sat May 23, 2009 8:08 pm

Wow, thank you so much, Red!

...but my formatting? What was it that made it hard to read?

redwinter101 · Post by **redwinter101** » Sat May 23, 2009 8:19 pm

I'll PM you, Julie.

jen · Post by **jen** » Mon May 03, 2010 1:19 am

Julie

Love this.

And anxious to read more!!!

NocturneInCMoll · Post by **NocturneInCMoll** » Mon May 03, 2010 3:00 am

Thanks so much, Jen! Glad you like. I'll try and get on Ch. 5 as soon as I can, but my Moonlight muse has taken a leave of absence lately...

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