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Wonderful stuff, once again, Lucky. :thumbs:

Magnificent action scene and that cliffhanger ending! :gasp:
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I agree with everyone else - this is wonderfully visual. A scene like this could have been so distracting if you had to spend time working out who was where and what they were doing - but this was wonderfully done and incredibly exciting as a result. And I just loved this line:
librarian_7 wrote:The rock winging out of the night was silent until it struck the horseman next to Roberts in the forehead, with a meaty thunk.
Brilliant.

And uh-oh on the ending...

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As others have said here, I felt like I was watching it play out on screen! No, I felt like I was there!!! :thud: A great action-packed chapter. Slade took to his new nature very well!!!! :gasp: You are an evil cliffie writer!!!! :coffee: I'm very worried about Sally now!! :eek2: I love your writing and I love this story and I can't wait to see what happens next... :yahoo: :yahoo: :clapping: :clapping: :clapping: :slappy: :seesaw: :scarycat: :bash: :bash: :nails: :nosee: :yahoo: :yahoo: :clapping: :clapping: :hyper2: :hyper2: :fingerscrossed: :fingerscrossed: :dracula: :clover: :chair: :yahoo: :yahoo: :yahoo: :clapping: :clapping: :clapping: :clapping: :thud: :thud: :thud: :thud: :notworthy: :worship: :heart: :rainbow: :flowers:


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quote: There were times for finesse, times to make the vampire’s bite a thing of pleasure and grace. And times to make it an instrument of terror and harsh justice.

Perfect sentence, perfect chapter. Now, please save Sally. Penina
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Re: Dust--Chapter 12, PG-13

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Oh my gosh Lucky!! The ending! What a cliffie!! :gasp: Sally's in trouble! :eek2:

Spectacular battle scene! Omg, I LOVED it! Josef and Slade wiped em out--Josef taking down Roberts was just awesomeness, perfect awesomeness.

I hope Sally is okay! Can't wait for the next chapter. :ysmile:
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Wonderful job Lucky, action scenes are difficult and you managed this one with flying colors. This story has more cliffhangers than a cactus has spines! Every time it gets delicious it gets prickly, and somebody ends up bloody.
(okay small pun there)

I loved the tie ins, the perfect level of action, narration and imagination, and the fledgling finding his hunger. I like all the others here are eagerly awaiting the next installment.
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Just wanted to thank everyone, again!, for reading and bearing with me on this long journey. I do promise that the next chapter is largely done, I should be posting within the next few days.

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It's great seeing Slade's perceptions on how everything has changed for him ... wonderfully vivid.

And yikes, that is one heck of a cliff-hanger ....
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Josef and Slade make quite the formidable duo - swift, deadly, merciless.

Fantastic.

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