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Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Thu Apr 02, 2009 4:55 pm
by starbucksjunkie
I always imagined what this scene would be like, and you've absolutely captured it perfectly, Pgal.
You brought to my attention what I've never given consideration to before: how Mick must walk the knife edge between concern and care for someone he shouldn't (Beth) and risking pissing off the vamp he can't afford to anger, even if Josef is his friend. He's playing with fire here, and he knows it. Bravo.
Now, about this:
He was going to see Beth again, despite the danger to both of them. He ignored the twinge of anticipation he felt and headed for a much-needed shower.
All together everyone: SEE-QUEL! SEE-QUEL! SEE-QUEL! SEE-QUEL!

Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Thu Apr 02, 2009 9:02 pm
by Luxe de Luxe
This is just so, sooo, good. There are so many phrases that just caught me whole.
His grip tightened on the neck of the bottle in his hand as he swept into the apartment, leading with his nose.
He never just 'enters' an apartment, does he? Really very descriptive. This was the line that made me certain I was going to enjoy this.
Some other favourites:
"Help now," Mick rasped. "Bitch later."
I could really see him saying this.
The thin thread of Josef's patience snapped with an almost audible twang.
Can't tell you how much I enjoyed this. Darn that's good.
You've got a jones for that reporter!
I've never heard that expression before, but it made me laugh. The language is so fresh!
The command in Josef's voice brought Mick's gaze to the elder's face. "You handle this or I will - and I guarantee you won't like my methods."
Now that, is seriously scary Josef.
Yeah, this was too good.
Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Thu Apr 02, 2009 10:01 pm
by PNWgal
francis, thank you...I'm happy you think I hit the mark with this.
Awww, geez,
Ranger - you flatter me and I'm honored.
Thanks,
coco - I have to admit my favorite ML parts are anything Mick/Josef.
Thanks,
karen - I'm glad you think I did good!
Misfit!

Figured Josef's paranoia would war with his friendship with Mick and Mick's lucky he got away with just a warning.

(and I owe you some much-deserved feedback over on IM)
Thanks for giving this a read,
MLSonata.
LOL, thanks,
lynnrxgal!
Karen, I always so look forward to your feedback because you pull the coolest stuff out of my work. Josef's willing to cut Mick a bit of slack, but not much before he'll handle things his way.
Thanks,
Grace...I agree with you about the blanks. It drives me nuts to wonder about stuff like this and I do like a good "what if" fic.
GA, you know I couldn't have written this without you.

I'm glad you think I was spot on there with Josef...he always makes me very nervous when I write him - I never know if he's going to sic one of his minions...err, supporters after me.
LOL,
mitzie, janicevictoria - thank you so much!
Thanks
Alle...you're makin' me

just a bit.
Now how could I not write this when you stirred up the muses,
Liana?

I agree with you on Josef's progression when it came to Beth - but here, he'd still be VERY suspicious of her.
Great analogy,
SBJ - I think you're right. Mick definitely walks a very fine line between Beth and Josef, because I believe without question Josef would "take care" of Beth should she expose vampires. (LOL, don't stir up the plot bunnies again!

)
Luxe...thank you. You picked out more than a few of my favorite bits of the story as well.

Josef is just such a complex character, it's a joy to write him.
Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Sat Apr 04, 2009 5:14 am
by greenleaf9
YAY!! You continued the one-shot!
I LOVE the way you write Josef...just love, love, love.
Poor Mick...I don't have any quotes to pull, because if I pulled my favorite quotes, I'd wind up quoting the entire thing. I so enjoy your writing, Jen.

Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Sun Dec 06, 2009 6:29 pm
by Albra
Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Sun Dec 06, 2009 6:40 pm
by francis
I read this again after it came up in active topics. Yep, still brilliant.

Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Sun Dec 06, 2009 8:21 pm
by greenleaf9
Hey Jen--saw this in the active topics thread and decided to meander on over for a re-read.
It's just as good as I remember it. This
is Josef and Mick. You write them both so perfectly in character--it's like watching the show.
Lovely, lovely one-shot.

Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Sun Dec 06, 2009 9:29 pm
by seamus3333
It's unbelievable how you are able to bring Mick and Josef to life with two or three sentences. A year and a half disappears and I'm watching an episode of Moonlight, a better written one than usual. Thanks to whoever brought it up on active topics, I missed it first time around.
Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2010 1:10 pm
by susieb
This is perfection. I now have a new jones myself: reading your fabulous work. I began with Half the World is Dark, then Suffer Not Silently. You've brought ML to life for me once again. BRAVO!
Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2010 3:44 pm
by lynnrxgal
Lovely re-read. It's still magical, isn't it, Pgal?
Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2010 5:16 pm
by PNWgal
Thanks,
susie, for giving this a read - and
lynnrxgal, thanks for the reread.

Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2010 6:03 pm
by moonlightlover60
Wow this was fabulous

and so spot on with Mick and especially Josef's characterizations. I just love the a look at
behind the scenes or what we never got to see, thanks for filling in the blanks for us.

Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2010 6:32 pm
by PNWgal
MLlover60, thank you! Mick had to get that silver out somehow and Josef would be the logical choice - and I doubt Mr. Kostan would be happy to hear that vampires had been revealed to a reporter.

Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Fri Apr 23, 2010 2:44 am
by AussieJo
Thanks PNW!

Re: Salvation in Suffering - PG-13
Posted: Fri Apr 23, 2010 2:54 am
by PNWgal
You are MOST welcome, Jo!