Re: Drabble: Till Death (PG-13)
Posted: Wed Feb 09, 2011 3:14 pm
oh,oh, ooooh , alle.. 
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Drabble: Till Death (PG-13)
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Re: Drabble: Till Death (PG-13)
Posted: Wed Feb 09, 2011 8:57 pm
Jenna and maggatha3, thank you so much. I love drabbles. I should do more of them. It's a great exercise, to express a lot in such a restricted space. Drabbles are often like poems for me...
Re: Drabble: Till Death (PG-13)
Posted: Wed Feb 09, 2011 9:27 pm
Alle
Saw this pop back to the top of Active Topics, it is so great to see excellent pieces like this return.
The first time I read this, I couldn't claim to have a preference. Both were superb, and that is still true--but at this moment, I like the second one.
The first sentence sums up the overall destructiveness of the relationship and then he moved into how she gained that power over him.
Wonderful!
Thank you!
Jenna
Saw this pop back to the top of Active Topics, it is so great to see excellent pieces like this return.
The first time I read this, I couldn't claim to have a preference. Both were superb, and that is still true--but at this moment, I like the second one.
The first sentence sums up the overall destructiveness of the relationship and then he moved into how she gained that power over him.
Wonderful!
Thank you!
Jenna
Re: Drabble: Till Death (PG-13)
Posted: Sat Aug 27, 2011 11:52 pm
Very good, Alle! The first version gave me shivers reading it through. You put so much thought into that heartbeat of a pause before Mick said, "She was my wife." Very believable and very credible that he would have thought all those things.
Re: Drabble: Till Death (PG-13)
Posted: Sun Aug 28, 2011 12:33 am
Thank you! I think it's so cool that different people prefer different versions. 