Six Months --Challenge #107 (PG-13)

[librarian_7]

Thanks, everyone who read and commented. Sorry to be so sad...I do have another, less sad one now posted.

I'm so pleased to have gotten across what I intended...in several ways.

Lucky

[RangerCM]

So sweet. I think she would have approved of the epitaph.

[moonlight_vixen]

This was absolutely heartwrenching, Lucky. And incredibly beautiful. Great job!

[mitzie]

That was so beautifully sad!!!!


mitzie

[jenstc2003]

So beautiful, Lucky- but so very sad. *wipes eyes*

[Fleur de Lisa]

sniff, wonderful, lucky.
What is it with you writers trying to make me cry??!!

[Catmoon]

Very beautiful. Just have to echo everyone else's comments and say that small bit about the garden and her love of growing (living) things really added the perfect touch and gave us a profound clue to her personality. I really was happy to see Josef seemed to be moving on, by the time we saw him with Simone.

[Luxe de Luxe]

so sad, Lucky, so terribly sad. Your Josef is a melancholy fellow beneath his snarky humour. Perhaps that's what keeps him sane.

[Fishy]

Lucky,
Got back from my working trip late yesterday. When I switched my computer on I saw that you had written two 'shorties', Yippee ! What a treat!!!!!

I've read this one through three times, and think that it is a triump - so much emotion and subtle inference giving us information. Yep, like some other readers, I did wonder if it was going to be about MicK for the first couple of lines, and then you drew me into the story. After caring for and loving Sarah for so long - thank you so much for setting Joseph free.
Fishy

[GuardianAngel]

Beautiful, Lucky. I don't think Josef was prepared for just how much Sarah made him feel. You can't help but feel angry for him, that he'd come so close to happiness and had it wrenched away. The torment of what could have been. *sigh* It's so unfair.

The Turning didn't work so Josef wasn't able to claim her in that way. But he did find a way. I love that he gives her his name on her tombstone. I think Sarah would have approved.




*edited to remove a word that didnt' make sense*

[librarian_7]

I think that Sarah--alive or dead--will always have a profound influence on Josef's worldview. Others have tried, and done a wonderful job, of exploring Josef's attraction to Sarah, and what it was about her that captured the heart of such an ancient, jaded creature. I tend to look more at her effect on him, and, like everything about Josef, it's complicated. This is one reason he's such an immensely satisfying character to work with--nothing is simple, nothing is as it appears on the surface.

Lucky

[Phoenix]

That was beautiful, Lucky.

[Moonlighter]

This was beautiful, Lucky. I had a feeling this was some of Josef's musings. That last line is heart-wrenching.

[cassysj]

Such a beautiful story to revisit

[allegrita]

Oh goodness, I remember this so well but it's been an age since I read it. Thanks for bumping it up, Carol... it's such a wonderful "essence of Josef" piece. Not a simple man, our vamp. I like the conflicted feelings: loss and yearning, but also a feeling of freedom and an ability to move on at last. And I love the fact that not only did he give her his name on her tombstone, but he waited to see it until the rawness of her burial place had been smoothed away by time and loving care.

In its complexity, in its mixture of so many feelings, this little story feels right. Every line feels right.