Knock, Knock (Challenge #114, First Lines) (PG-13)

[librarian_7]

The masters comment was a stroke (no pun intended) of genius - Nagano, indeed

I have to admit, this is one of the things I most love about fanfic...the ability to drop in something as tiny as that Nagano reference, and have people pick up on it. Especially since we know Josef is as interested in golf as Jason is...

Lucky

[fairytoes]

Fantastic!!! Love it!

Thank you

[francis]

“If I knew what happened, I wouldn’t have amnesia, would I?” Josef turned and paced over to the window, shoving his hands in his pockets.

“Hasn’t affected your personality,” Mick muttered.

I love this. It’s tense and I’m awfully worried for Josef, but there is so much gigglesnortworthy material here. And so many hints on things we know, like Josef playing golf and Mick calling him Joz'f, and 1627 must have been some year for him.

“Is Tiger playing? If not, that Nagano kid is looking good.”

Love it!!!

Oh this begs for a sequel, for another chapter, heck, for a one-liner. Please let us know what happened and how Josef will get out of this. Did he have some kind of shock that shook his personalities around? Did he get a silver bullet in the brain? Was he just very hungry and things will straighten out once Louise gets the refill?

I’m dying here!!!

[librarian_7]

Thanks francis...I promise, as soon as I figure it out, I'll continue!

Lucky

[Luxe de Luxe]

Ha ha! yes, I'm with Red. This was just the opening salvo. you can't leave us wondering how this happened!

[LadyAilith]

I promise, as soon as I figure it out, I'll continue!

Lucky

Yay! This story just screams for a second part. I'm really looking forward to finding out what Josef's reaction is to finding out he's a vampire and that he's just slugged down a glass of human blood!
Thank you so very much Lucky!

LadyAilith

[MickLifeCrisis]

I promise, as soon as I figure it out, I'll continue!

Lucky

Yay! This story just screams for a second part. I'm really looking forward to finding out what Josef's reaction is to finding out he's a vampire and that he's just slugged down a glass of human blood!
Thank you so very much Lucky!

LadyAilith

I'm with LadyAilith! Can't wait for the rest!

[crazy fluffy]

Great story!
And I'm with the others, I want more to read.

[one.zebra]

If you were a crummy writer, this would not be your problem, would it my dear?
/file under backhanded compliment/
1z

You guys...always wanting more, more, more. I really had intended this as a one shot...but if you insist, I'll see about it. (Just give me a bit of time...I've got other irons in the fire, you know!)

Lucky

[tucutecats]

I just re read this and I know we,re greedy lil' beggers but more pleezzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

[MoonShadow]

Okay Lucky,

I know that everyone has been begging for this to be continued, I know that you intended this as a oneshot for a challenge but isn't that how some of the best stories have started? Chess is lovely and I know that you are very busy. However, that said, this is one of "THOSE" stories. It can't end here.

You write so well, so beautifully precise, in character and with so much depth and color. Please put this one on the top of the stack, and we promise to be good!

MS

[wpgrace]

He's not just some kind of vampire... he is THE vampire... now Lola's gone and all...

[Albra]

How I could overlook this brillant story

I am with others : ... more... ... more ... ... more ...

I couldn't agree with One.zebra more :

If you were a crummy writer, this would not be your problem, would it my dear?

Thank you, Lucky

[Lilly]

*hands on hips* Oh, sure, people. Just what she needs -- more encouragement.

Have pity on a poor underpaid beta, will ya? I can hardly keep up with her as it is! And now you all want MORE??

She's got two multi-chapters going and a one-shot on hold (oops, did I say that out loud? ) and now you all want more of this too?? Good grief.


(And just in case there's any doubt I'm kidding -- I was the first to tell her there's NO WAY she could stop there. See, Lucky, I TOLD you so. *nyah nyah* I do love being right. )

[Albra]

...for poor underpaid Beta ...