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Re: Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Wed Jun 16, 2010 10:35 pm
by rijane
Sweet, brief look at the two relationships I loved best about Moonlight: Mick and Beth (clearly), and Mick and Josef. I enjoyed their initial repartee and Beth's presence without saying a word. And I love how you've made the dusk both an ending and a beginning. Lovely work!

Re: Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Wed Jun 16, 2010 11:43 pm
by redwinter101
Thanks, honey. :hearts: :hearts: :hearts: I'll agree on Mick and Josef, but don't make me pick a second fave, 'k?

Red

Re: Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Thu Jun 17, 2010 5:00 am
by protea
This is beautiful - amazing little story you told with just a few words! :clapping:

Re: Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Fri Jun 18, 2010 9:04 pm
by redwinter101
:curtesy: Thanks, protea. :flowers: :flowers:

Red

Re: Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Fri Jun 18, 2010 9:17 pm
by coco
Absolutely fabulous. The dialogue is spot on. Perfect banter between them. It read like I was watching a little snippet from the TV show itself.

:twothumbs:

Re: Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Fri Jun 18, 2010 10:07 pm
by redwinter101
:hyper2: :hyper2: and :hug: :hug: :hug: :hearts: :hearts: for coco.

Red

Re: Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Sat Jun 19, 2010 7:53 am
by Shadow
What a very lovely moment here at dusk. As always, I love your Josef .... four hundred years on, and he still finds so much joy in life, in these simple daily things. (And no doubt giving Mick a bit of a hard time is a continual source of joy for him, too!) On to the next one .....

Re: Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Sat Jun 19, 2010 12:16 pm
by redwinter101
Shadow wrote:(And no doubt giving Mick a bit of a hard time is a continual source of joy for him, too!)
:giggle:

It's the little things that make the world go round. :biggrin:

Red

Re: Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Sat Sep 11, 2010 1:00 am
by Moonlighter
Ahh, Red -- I let your Divine Series get away from me and never came back to find the last 2, or rather 3 parts -- until now!

What a lovely, lovely image for the end of the day, yet the beginning of the night. I too enjoy the fact that Josef still finds life fascinating after his 4 centuries of hanging around, and I can't help but think that Mick is a large part of his renewed interest. Until he loses his audience to the sun in his friend's world, that is. Delicious reading, Red. Thank you!
jen wrote: Those brief shining moments are priceless. To me, Moonlight itself was one of those moments.
Wow, Jen -- I couldn't have said that better myself and ITA 100%!!!

Re: 7a. Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Sat Sep 11, 2010 7:25 am
by redwinter101
:curtesy: and :smooch:

Thanks, Moonlighter.

Red :heart:

Re: 7a. Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Sat Oct 30, 2010 12:26 am
by jen
How lovely!

Here is Josef, forged by the trauma of his past and very much in his element.

I must agree with Eris and GuardianAngel about the last line feeling a bit ominous, but in life there are up and downs and there was relative peace here.

Thank you!

Jenna

:flowers: :flowers: :flowers: :flowers:

Re: 7a. Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Sat Nov 06, 2010 10:21 pm
by redwinter101
I love that so many of you found the last line ominous - I guess, in hindsight, it could be taken that way. I just meant that our gang are always getting themselves in some scrape or other so they should enjoy the brief respite while they get the chance. :giggle:

Thanks for the re-read, jen.

Red

Re: 7a. Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 6:09 pm
by Kara
Ahhhhhhh. That's what this make me feel like. It's like when you're so tired and then you get home and find a welcoming smile of the one you love. :heart:

Thank you Red. :rose:

Re: 7a. Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Fri Jul 01, 2011 5:35 pm
by PNWgal
Now, how is it that I never commented on this one?? :slaphead:

Short, but so lovely and sweet. :hearts:
redwinter101 wrote:Mick's soft laugh subsided and silence fell as the door closed, Josef's vibrant hum lingering. Beth pulled him into her arms as the soft lights glowed to life; another day over, another night beginning, each player in their allotted role.

In this brief, precious moment, all was right with the world.
I love the end of this. Beth holds the promise of the day, the things seen clearly in the light. Love, hope, normalcy, human. Josef is the cool comfort of the night, a friend but edgy and dangerous. Mick is the bridge between the two, one foot in the light, one in the dark, two circles surround him, and he completes both of them.

VERY nice. :heart:

Re: 7a. Vespers, story 1 (dusk) - G

Posted: Fri Jul 01, 2011 7:36 pm
by redwinter101
Thanks, Kara.

PNWgal, a Mick Venn diagram. What a delightful thought. :hearts: :hearts: :hearts: :hearts: :hearts:

Red