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Her Photograph - PG (Chall. #159 Seven lines)
Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2014 3:24 pm
by MickLifeCrisis
It's funny how a simple photograph can transport all your senses back to a specific moment in time.
The sounds of birds on a summer afternoon - and of her sighs.
The smell of a flower garden - and of her perfume.
The softness of her dress - and her skin.
Seeing her pretty smile - and the look of longing in her eyes.
The taste of lemonade - and her lips.
Oh, my darling Lilah.
Re: Her Photograph - PG (Chall. #159 Seven lines)
Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2014 3:48 pm
by Lilly
Oh,
MLC!! This is SO lovely!
Such simple, delicate phrasing... and it evokes so much longing and emotion.
Just
wonderful!
Re: Her Photograph - PG (Chall. #159 Seven lines)
Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2014 5:31 pm
by darkstarrising
Absolutely lovely, MLC
Just the kind of thoughts Mick would have for the love he had to give up.
Re: Her Photograph - PG (Chall. #159 Seven lines)
Posted: Sun Sep 07, 2014 6:39 pm
by allegrita
This is almost a poem. What beautiful images. Mick really loved her.
Re: Her Photograph - PG (Chall. #159 Seven lines)
Posted: Fri Sep 26, 2014 3:01 am
by diane31
Oh this is beau-ti-ful!
Re: Her Photograph - PG (Chall. #159 Seven lines)
Posted: Fri Sep 26, 2014 3:20 am
by MickLifeCrisis
Thank you everyone! So glad you liked this!
I found it interesting that Mick said he had to give up most of the things from his human life, but chose to keep the photograph of Lilah. And the way he held it, and looked at it... this had to be what he was thinking.
Re: Her Photograph - PG (Chall. #159 Seven lines)
Posted: Fri Sep 26, 2014 5:08 am
by allegrita
I love it... and you know, rereading it, it struck me that this could almost be Ray's thoughts, away in Europe during the war, looking at her photograph and thinking longingly of her. She had two wonderful men who loved her so much. Lucky lady.
Re: Her Photograph - PG (Chall. #159 Seven lines)
Posted: Sun Sep 28, 2014 9:03 am
by Shadow
The moment when Mick is looking at Lilah's picture is one of my favorite scenes, because you can tell that so much is going through his mind just then.
This is such a beautiful, vivid way to describe those thoughts, and the way he was transported back into that time. Love it!
Re: Her Photograph - PG (Chall. #159 Seven lines)
Posted: Sun Sep 28, 2014 2:52 pm
by MickLifeCrisis
Thank you!