Wonderful stuff, once again, Lucky.
Magnificent action scene and that cliffhanger ending!
Dust--Chapter 12, PG-13
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I agree with everyone else - this is wonderfully visual. A scene like this could have been so distracting if you had to spend time working out who was where and what they were doing - but this was wonderfully done and incredibly exciting as a result. And I just loved this line:
And uh-oh on the ending...
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Brilliant.librarian_7 wrote:The rock winging out of the night was silent until it struck the horseman next to Roberts in the forehead, with a meaty thunk.
And uh-oh on the ending...
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As others have said here, I felt like I was watching it play out on screen! No, I felt like I was there!!! A great action-packed chapter. Slade took to his new nature very well!!!! You are an evil cliffie writer!!!! I'm very worried about Sally now!! I love your writing and I love this story and I can't wait to see what happens next...
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quote: There were times for finesse, times to make the vampire’s bite a thing of pleasure and grace. And times to make it an instrument of terror and harsh justice.
Perfect sentence, perfect chapter. Now, please save Sally. Penina
Perfect sentence, perfect chapter. Now, please save Sally. Penina
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Oh my gosh Lucky!! The ending! What a cliffie!! Sally's in trouble!
Spectacular battle scene! Omg, I LOVED it! Josef and Slade wiped em out--Josef taking down Roberts was just awesomeness, perfect awesomeness.
I hope Sally is okay! Can't wait for the next chapter.
Spectacular battle scene! Omg, I LOVED it! Josef and Slade wiped em out--Josef taking down Roberts was just awesomeness, perfect awesomeness.
I hope Sally is okay! Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Wonderful job Lucky, action scenes are difficult and you managed this one with flying colors. This story has more cliffhangers than a cactus has spines! Every time it gets delicious it gets prickly, and somebody ends up bloody.
(okay small pun there)
I loved the tie ins, the perfect level of action, narration and imagination, and the fledgling finding his hunger. I like all the others here are eagerly awaiting the next installment.
(okay small pun there)
I loved the tie ins, the perfect level of action, narration and imagination, and the fledgling finding his hunger. I like all the others here are eagerly awaiting the next installment.
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Just wanted to thank everyone, again!, for reading and bearing with me on this long journey. I do promise that the next chapter is largely done, I should be posting within the next few days.
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It's great seeing Slade's perceptions on how everything has changed for him ... wonderfully vivid.
And yikes, that is one heck of a cliff-hanger ....
And yikes, that is one heck of a cliff-hanger ....
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Josef and Slade make quite the formidable duo - swift, deadly, merciless.
Fantastic.
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Fantastic.
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