The Fountain (G) - Seven Sentence Chall. #159

[MickLifeCrisis]

The Fountain

When I saw her walking barefoot through a freezing fountain at two in the morning, I should have stayed hidden.

But I didn’t.

When she saw me and starting walking towards me, I should have run away.

But I didn’t.

When she told me I looked familiar to her, that she thought she knew me from somewhere, I shouldn’t have felt a little happy about that.

Happy that deep down, she remembered me.

But I did.

[Lilly]

Oh, MLC! That gave me the most wonderful little shiver.

What a beautifully balanced response to the challenge! It's remarkable that something even shorter than a drabble could convey so much about that meeting. We saw it on Mick's face -- and you captured it perfectly.

[allegrita]

Ohhhhhh, I know just what you mean, Lilly--I got goosebumps!

This is just wonderful. It's perfectly Mick. Perfectly. Thank you, MLC!

It's astounding how much can be portrayed with so few words. I LOVE this Challenge, I'm looking forward to reading a bunch more of these (and I hope to write a few too)!!

[choccyterri]

Oh I am loving this too MLC!

I completely agree with the other ladies! Those brief moments when they found one another are perfectly placed!

We can feel all of his emotions in your sentences. It's so wonderful to hear Mick's voice.

Thank you so much for sharing!

[darkstarrising]

Wonderful, MLC Love Mick's should / didn't tug go war with himself. In the end though, he was happy know in some part of Beth remembered him.

[diane31]

Oh this is such a perfect voice over of Mick, and for such an important event too. It is so him, torn between what he thinks is best and what he yearns for.
Perfect!

[MickLifeCrisis]

Thank you so much everyone for the lovely comments. I'm glad this hit a chord with you. And I'm always happy when the readers say my Mick sounds like Mick.

[cassysj]

This is wonderful and perfect, perfect Mick

[nutmegger911]

MLC, I absolutely love this. You can just hear Mick's voiceover. This is so him. Thanks.