A Trip to the Morgue (G) Chall. #159 (7 lines)

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A Trip to the Morgue (G) Chall. #159 (7 lines)

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Many thanks to Allegrita and, ahem... Mr. MLC, for bouncing one of the lines around with me till it worked. :friends:


A Trip to the Morgue - G


I make trips to the morgue often – for blood, information, or both. Those visits don’t bother me. But bringing parents to identify the body of their child is one of the hardest trips I ever have to make. Their grief overwhelms my vampire senses and I notice every sound, every sight, every emotion, and every scent.

The rapid heartbeats amid the echoing footsteps; the tired, worn faces staring at the stark white sheet and all it implies; the anxiety and dread; the smell of disinfectant, tears, blood, disease, death and… Beth.

Wait – Beth? What in the world is Beth doing here?
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Re: A Trip to the Morgue (G) Chall. #159 (7 lines)

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I love this one... in the episode, you can see on his face how hard this is for Mick... and then that little :wtf: moment when he sniffs Beth. :laugh: Now you've given us a peek into his thoughts, too. :hearts:
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I love this. It was so unexpected.

She completely distracts him. Tromps all over his internal monologue and everything.
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Re: A Trip to the Morgue (G) Chall. #159 (7 lines)

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:snicker: Yes, she does! Thanks for reading and commenting, NM!

Thank you also Alle! I love to get inside Mick's head... when he lets me.

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I really like this one
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I love how he first finds smelling Beth completely normal! And then how he completely switches gears when he realizes it's actually not. She just takes over doesn't she! :hearts:
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Really like this, MLC :hug: I'd never thought of a vampire's senses being overwhelmed by the emotions of grieving parents, but it makes sense. That last line reflects Mick's facial expression perfectly when he detects Beth's scent.
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